rate: 9
idea: +
grammar: great!
advice:

I am actually really enjoying this! I've read the first 8 chapters and it's really good. I like how it starts from the rapists point of view because it's something I've never heard before (most POVs are either the boys or main characters) but hearing from him was interesting. I definitely think you should keep going and it is a touchy subject but you're doing a great job being sensitive to the topic.

The only thing is although it is a story some of it seems unrealistic. Obviously there are going to be unrealistic things in every story but I don't think the nurse would tell Harry all of the information she did and I also don't think she'd end up at their house. Maybe Harry could have read it the next day in the paper and gone to see her until she wakes up? But that's just my personal opinion!

Other than that I really think it's going somewhere big. I need to keep reading I'm just really busy right now so I will do that!

If you believe in yourself and have dedication and pride - and never quit, you'll be a winner. The price of victory is high but so are the rewards. -Paul Bryant

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