rate: 9
idea: =
grammar: good
advice: 1-ish

I really like this story, great detail and pretty good grammar as well. Some of the words are misspelled here and there but I'm a grammar nazi. I love all the detail you have added to the characters and that Harry is consistent with his attitude. He hasn't been a douche in the first chapter and then the second he all of a sudden is in love with her. I hate when that happens...

I also like that you are simple with the characters. I hate when I'm about to read a story and I have to read a paragraph for like 10 characters. You describe the characters well enough so you don't have to have a picture for them.

1. I like the POVs but sometimes you give one POV and then when the next person speaks you say the same exact thing that has just happened so it's repetitive.

Overall I really like it! I haven't read the whole thing but I look forward to continuing it!