Okay, Here is my review:

1: I really like your story line and let me just say, you are a great writer!

2: The only thing that I think you need to work on is that your story has a lot of characters so maybe try to make it more clear who's POV it is and maybe try not to change characters that quickly. I know that the first chapters are going to be an introduction sorta so its normal to be introducing the background of the characters but for future reference, try not to switch characters so much.

3: I LOVE LOVE LOVE the diversity in your characters and how they all have problems but they aren't all the same stuff over and over again.

If you put some more chapters up, like 3 or 4 more, then check back for another review!!!

Notes

I absolutely LOVE all of your stories (from the people who have commented)
I love reading them so please please please keep them coming!
I take the bus to school so I will probably read them in the mornings and rate more at night too so byeeeee
-Sofi<3