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The Darkness In His Heart.
Title : The Darkness In His Heart
Author : the_one_and_only_mrs_styles
My rating for you story: ~7~
What you could do to make it better:
Well, it's alright, but a little confusing. In the beginning, there as punctuation errors. Like you either missed periods, commas, question marks, etc. It looks neater and more professional when there aren't any mistakes. Which is why you proof read at least 2 times. 3 to be positive. Then at the last chapter you updated, I didn't know who Harry was with. One second grinding on Tiffany, the next second with Cheyenne. You have to make sure that you don't mix the characters up, or else the readers get confused and stop reading.
Things that were PHENOMINIALL:
Its a pretty good book in general. You know when you have to make new paragraphs, and you make sure you add a lot of dialog. Just make sure you triple check your story before you Post :D
~ Deborah xx
Author : the_one_and_only_mrs_styles
My rating for you story: ~7~
What you could do to make it better:
Well, it's alright, but a little confusing. In the beginning, there as punctuation errors. Like you either missed periods, commas, question marks, etc. It looks neater and more professional when there aren't any mistakes. Which is why you proof read at least 2 times. 3 to be positive. Then at the last chapter you updated, I didn't know who Harry was with. One second grinding on Tiffany, the next second with Cheyenne. You have to make sure that you don't mix the characters up, or else the readers get confused and stop reading.
Things that were PHENOMINIALL:
Its a pretty good book in general. You know when you have to make new paragraphs, and you make sure you add a lot of dialog. Just make sure you triple check your story before you Post :D
~ Deborah xx
Notes
Could you please review and rate The mentally brave please?
thanks =)
1/23/14