Fanfiction 101
Everything Has Changed
(1) Your story was way too rushed and confusing. It’s confusing because you rushed, and I feel like you left out a lot of things because of that. I had to stop reading it after like chapter 6 because I just couldn’t figure out who Amber was or what happened to Marcel. He went from a nerd to a douche in like 3 seconds and I was just like… what. o.O
You need to slow down, explain things more clearly, capitalize your chapter titles, and work on your grammar.
If you found this review to be disappointing, I'm can't say I'm sorry. As I said, I am a brutally honest person, or so people tell me. If you would like me to take this down, I will, just ask me. Don't bitch about it either; I don't care what you think, I'm just telling you what I think. Don't get mad, you asked for it. Don't rate this badly just because you don't like what I say. But on the off chance you like what I'm telling you, I'm glad you could learn something from me.
@That_clifford_girl
Hi! I don't normally do this but I'm just gonna get right on it.
It's in my knowledge that this author isn't coming back. Which means your review isn't coming. But! I recently started up a review store so if you're interested you can link your story there.
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12/31/16