The Story Critic
Abused
Rating: 7.5
Positive points:
-You have cliff-hangers once in a while
-Not a lot of grammer mistakes
-Not a lot of punctuation mistakes
Negitave Points:
-Your chapters are way to spaced! put them together more instead
of one or two spaces every chapter!
-As I said, Not a lot of grammer and punctuation mistakes.
But, there are some of them there.
-There are so much of these stories out there! A girl who is abused, Has an old best friend
who left to become a singer, Plays truth or dare then ends up having to
kiss him, Starting to have a crush on him, but doesn't know if he feels
the same way.
Overall thoughts: Your story is average. Try basing it off of your ideas instead of somebody else's ideas. It isn't a story to be left alone though.
Positive points:
-You have cliff-hangers once in a while
-Not a lot of grammer mistakes
-Not a lot of punctuation mistakes
Negitave Points:
-Your chapters are way to spaced! put them together more instead
of one or two spaces every chapter!
-As I said, Not a lot of grammer and punctuation mistakes.
But, there are some of them there.
-There are so much of these stories out there! A girl who is abused, Has an old best friend
who left to become a singer, Plays truth or dare then ends up having to
kiss him, Starting to have a crush on him, but doesn't know if he feels
the same way.
Overall thoughts: Your story is average. Try basing it off of your ideas instead of somebody else's ideas. It isn't a story to be left alone though.
Notes
Sorry if you didn't get a review you liked. I am an honest person so PLEASE don't hate me!-UniqueMOFO_11
(Im putting this note on every chapter now. even if your review is good.)
plz check out my story it's called "inspirational messages" and take your time I don't care when you review it as long as you do thanks so much
3/10/15