The Story Critic
Goodbye to yesterday
Rating: 6.5
Honestly, I found myself a little confused. But its a great story!
Positive Points:
-Not a lot of grammer mistakes.
-You put quotation marks when somebody spoke.
-You capitalized, Put commas, and put periods in the right places.
-The chapters are well written, but short.
Negitave points:
-I found myself a little confused in a whole chapter which that is NOT good. Instead of :D texting like this: Pretty Boy.
He texts like this: PrETtY bOy. and it makes it hard to read. I mean, there is no reason why he cant text normally!
-Once again, there are not a lot of grammer mistakes but there are some! I see that when you wrote ars you meant arse. Don't worry about it if you aren't brittish though!
-The chapters are short. I read all of your chapters in ten minutes. Try to make the chapters long, but not too long!
Overall thoughts: Well written, a little short, but pretty good!
Honestly, I found myself a little confused. But its a great story!
Positive Points:
-Not a lot of grammer mistakes.
-You put quotation marks when somebody spoke.
-You capitalized, Put commas, and put periods in the right places.
-The chapters are well written, but short.
Negitave points:
-I found myself a little confused in a whole chapter which that is NOT good. Instead of :D texting like this: Pretty Boy.
He texts like this: PrETtY bOy. and it makes it hard to read. I mean, there is no reason why he cant text normally!
-Once again, there are not a lot of grammer mistakes but there are some! I see that when you wrote ars you meant arse. Don't worry about it if you aren't brittish though!
-The chapters are short. I read all of your chapters in ten minutes. Try to make the chapters long, but not too long!
Overall thoughts: Well written, a little short, but pretty good!
plz check out my story it's called "inspirational messages" and take your time I don't care when you review it as long as you do thanks so much
3/10/15