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Two Kinds In One Tutor

Summary

he pins me up against the wall and i ask him in fright and being very weirded out that this geek is so damn strong, "marcel, what are you doing?" a sly smirk appears on his face then he whispers in my ear, " star, im gonna give u a lesson u wont ever forget..."

Characters

marcel

marcel

geeky, cute, and personality changes from time to time....

Chapters

Comments

@emmaphants
thanks so much, when i get time too, ill try to write more. ive just been very busy lately

lovable directioner lovable directioner
12/20/13

i think its cute! i havent had very much free time lately so i havent been able to read much but what ive read is cute

emmaphants emmaphants
12/20/13

@emmaphants
oh alright thanks, i was thinking about that too. i was trying to figure out how to seperate the paragraphs but ill start next chapter. but other than that, what do u think of the plot of the story itself?

lovable directioner lovable directioner
12/16/13
not trying to be mean, just trying to help but try using paragraphs. everytime a different person starts talking you should start a new paragraph. it makes it easier for the reader to focus. Also, instead of saying 'u' say 'you'. Also capitalize names and the first word of sentences. I know it's fanfiction and you probably feel like grammar and proper writing doesn't matter but a lot of people won't read it if the mechanics of the story are bad no matter how good the plot is. I don't mean to be a bitch, i'm sorry I'm just trying to help... I had a problem with long paragraphs too when I first started.
emmaphants emmaphants
12/8/13
@nandos for lunch?
thnx :) im glad u like it. ill continue it sometime this week
lovable directioner lovable directioner
11/19/13
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