To Be Loved - Comments

So good keep it up!

Oh my goodness, bae♡ why. That's so nice of youuuuuu

@ImpulsiveFreedom
Thank you so much for the feedback! :")

@CallMeBri
Omg that comment means so much coming from someone who is doing so well.

This is lovely! Keep it up because I'm looking forward to more! :) xxx

I really love your line at the start 'as if his hands could protect you from bullets.' thats a really amazing line and powerful!
Since you asked for advice in the forum I would mostly say description. Description of your character, even the boys, and the places they are in. Your thought space for Nala is really good. And description just makes it into a longer and more intriguing story, pulls you into the scene more if you get me? Watch grammar of course! We all do - it's one of the worse things about writing :P
But its a really interesting start. I like the idea of her ignoring Niall but he being the voice that she liked so much! Can't wait to see where you go with it all!

@iwritefanfictions_notrealbooks
cool your a really good writer and i looked at your page and saw that you love writing Hazza fanfics well i kinda think the same i really like Nialler ones too but yeah its really good and you should totally stick with this fanfic bc i can never find any good fanfics on this cite but then i found this and i be like mmmmmm and im usually just on Wattpad but my computer wont let me go on that for some reason but its really goochy

*much

@Jennah Wismer
Omg thank you so muck! And I love your ideas! some I was going to do and some I really want to do♡♡

You know what you should do you should like make all of the boys like go on the x factor and then they get together you know the story probably annyyway and then they should be like best friends like they are now and then like Nala should date Harry unless your a Larry shipper then you should make her date Niall unless you think all of them are gay then get that out of the picture but just make that blow up and stuff bc they are all under the age that they actually went on and stuff cuz you said that Lou is 17 and he went on at "18" (sorry i had to do that) anyway and yeah and if you like 5SOS you should maybe put them in there some where that would be so cool and yeah something like that and then maybe if you do the x factor thing then you should like make them all shocked and stuff and i dont thin that was a crappy chapter i thought it was good and you should totally go on with the fanfic:) (sorry for making this comment so long i just clearly had a lot to say lol:))