The Protectors - Comments

@sarahd98

aw thanks love and I will consider your suggestions I really appreciate them!!!

Hey lovely! You're doing a great job with this story so far!
If you wanted my input here's what I got for you:

-Try to really process your ideas, don't make your sentences too choppy, focus on using correct grammar, capitalization, etc.

-Don't rush anything! The fillers may be boring but they are essential!

-Don't be afraid to go a little out of the box and describe things in a totally strange way, but nonetheless, use a lot of detail because it paints a better picture for the reader, it almost gets them emotionally attached to the story.

-Be original!

I hope you consider my suggestions and you're doing amazing! Keep it up darlin'!