Dreaming - Comments

@Irish girl
thank thats actually the first positive comment i've received...and it means a lot that somebody actually likes it...i thought his story was hopeless...but thanks! i will try to fit in some time to update!<3

Very good so fair update please

@SonnyMarie
Yay! I'm glad I could help! :D

@SonnyMarie
Yay, but if you change your mind later on, I'm sorry!! But glad I could help!!!!!

@WontStopTill1DStops
No you didn't offend me...it doesn't hurt to get feed...now i now what i need to work on!<3

Hi! I just read this, and it is really good. I don't think you wanna know, but I guess you kinda need too. I gave your story a nine out of ten. Honestly, I love the plot and the idea of it. I love how good you write and I love how eloquent you are. However, (sorry) you need to work on grammar. I get the small mistakes every once in a while, but I think this is a bit too much. I get it if you're hurrying, but still. Also, everything seems kinda... Well, rushed. I mean, one second she's out to commit suicide (which honestly was an awesome starting. It made me so interested!). Then, she's home with Niall. Also, the scene at the hospital was very... Ummm, imaginary. I get it is a fanfic, but I mean. You can't be hooked to life support and be talking. It is just not possible. I should know. I used to be on life support, and so was my grandfather before he passed. We were on life support for at least a month, before we has it taken out. We both weren't responsive or anything. It took more than two weeks before I could open my eyes on life support. But other than those suggestions, this was really good and descriptive. I love your summary, because it was just beyond good. The smut was awesome, honestly. It's really good, but kinda rushed.... I'm really sorry. Please continue, and if I offended you in any way, I am so sorry. I was just trying to help. If you don't like my comment, feel free to message me and I will immediately take it down. I am sorry for any emotional harm.