Please review my story please?

I have finished my book "Do I Frighten You?" I need tips and stuff over it, Cause I am looking forward to publishing it, It is the most successful book I have wrote and I need your opinions. Please and thank you. xx

um well a couple of things
1. Check your spelling and grammar. This is uber important if there are spelling and grammar mistakes then a publisher will start reading it and put it away.

2. No graphic sex.......unless you want to publish it as a sex story and not a teen book the sex has to be toned down.

3. Make sure you change the names. I know you will but make sure it is thoroughly checked and changed.

4. This is probably the hardest but if you really want this published you probably need to delete it from here. Publishers don't like when the story has been posted elsewhere it makes it less "exclusive."

hope that helped :)