I really need a review on my newest story!?

Hey, I really need some reviews on my newest story My Destiny Is Unspoken, I just need to know what to fix and all that or if the story is shit and isn't going to go anywhere..here's the summary..
I walked through the library up and down all the aisles until I found what I was looking for
'Telekinesis'
My life has always been 'off' somehow, never being just quite right but that day 'the' day it happened I've been so curious..
I sit at the desk flipping through the pages when I see a kind of description
'Ability to move objects at a distance by mental power or other non- physical means'
No, no I won't believe it! it's the devils power, I cant..
And as always I ran, ran from my problems because that's all I do..
Its a Horror kind of thing based on Carrie and yeah I just need to know if its good thanx for taking your time on reading
xx
~Livvie~

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